Grace Leung
4/27/11
West Civ Essay 3
The traditions of structure, and patterns in Romanesque and Gothic Churches are truly diverse. Each of these different and detailed types of churches represent something. The Gothic churches show how important it was to be a community and how close the community was, with crips underneath the church. While the Romanesque churches describe how important privacy was and how closer of the soul was a big part of a person’s life. Romanesque and Gothic churches are well represented through the diversity of each’s architecture and appearance.
Both Gothic and Romanesque churches tell their own story, by just one look. Gothic churches have many different features, one is the attempt to look like German towns. In figure 1 this is succeeded as the top of the church has a point to it. This church looks almost roomy and very large, community was one contributor to the size and architecture of this church. The church looks very open and has many different openings. In figure 2 this is a Romanesque church. It has thick walls and a concealed look, while the Gothic church is the opposite. The lack in openings is evident and the high towers show how succluded it is. This is what the Romanesque churches went for.
It is evident how different these two churches can be, each church may symbolize something different to add to the contrast. Figure 3 is decorative for a Gothic church, but is still relevant to what a Gothic church looks like. This church has a very high ceiling and a wide area. It is very spacious. Figure 4, the Romanesque church is very secluded looking there are no doors on the side, but only visible on the front. The windows are completely open and thick brick it the base for this structure.
The Gothic tradition is a more open and an open society like tradition. Figure 5 is a very vivid example of Gothic tradition. It’s wings on the church are huge and the ceiling enormous. It is very open and makes a person feel like they could walk right in. An example of a Romanesque church is Figure 6, it is very closed, with a stone structure. Also it is not that high and instead is strong around the base and structure of the church.
The dissimilarities between these two traditional churches vary from large ones and small ones. The Gothic tradition is to have many fancy windows, while Romanesque is to have open windows on brick layer walls. This little difference is very signifigant. Another different that stood out in these few examples was the number of openings in the churches and how open it seemed to the community. The Gothis and Romanesque are truly different in the simplest and unimaginable ways.
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Figure 2
Figure 3 http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/3/30/St._Mary%27s_Basilica_Cracow_interior.jpg/800px-St._Mary%27s_Basilica_Cracow_interior.jpg
Figure 4
Figure 5
Figure 6
1. 5 paragraphs, nicely done!
ReplyDelete2. You had a great thesis statement that showed your point of view and was a strong statement to set up your paper.
3. You had sourcable information in each one that supported your thesis, (the pictures) but they aren't showing up at the bottom.
4.Body paragraphs filled with good sentences, that back up your opinion.
5. Your conclusion was good, but you need to say more about the theology and how they relate and are shown through the buildings.
6. Your evidence is good, and shown but make sure your last paragraph is your strongest.
7. No personal pronouns, good job
8. Good academic tone, the tone is professional and you can tell you know what you are talking a bout.
9. Since the sources are pictures, you kind of have to generalize about them, but you did good just stating facts that back up your opinion.
10. All your information included helps back up your thesis and is good information, none of it was unnecessary.
11. Your paper was original, but I think you need to spice it up a little. You did well, but didn't seem very enthusiastic or interested in the subject. Over all Good Job!
1. yes
ReplyDelete2 yes, but you did not include the religious theology
3. yes
4. yes
5. yes, but again include the religious theology of the time periods in the thesis
6. yes you included additional common features in each type of Cathedral. I.e.: strong structure around the base in Romanesque and Gothic being very open.
7. None
8. yes except there are a few run-on sentences. (topic sentence of the third paragraph. you could add "and" in between the two phrases) (2nd sentence in 2nd paragraph. Could also add "and" here) you could use conjunctions to make them not run-on sentences.
9. yes. you were very specific with describing the features of the Cathedrals.
10. n/a. no quotes needed
11. yes
1 yes
ReplyDelete2 yes
3 no, you did not follow the instructions for citing.
4 yes
5 yes
6 yes
7 yes
8 yes
9 yes
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11 yes
"The traditions of structure, and patterns in Romanesque and Gothic Churches are truly diverse."- don't put a comma after structure
“The Gothic churches show how important it was to be a community and how close the community was, with crips underneath the church. While the Romanesque churches describe how important privacy was and how closer of the soul was a big part of a person’s life.” Combine these sentences
“This church looks almost roomy and very large, community was one contributor to the size and architecture of this church.”-These are different sentences
“It is evident how different these two churches can be, each church may symbolize something different to add to the contrast”-separate these too
you did not include the name of the churches, either
Grace,
ReplyDelete1. Good, five paragraphs with body.
2. Okay but like Taylor said, make sure you mention theology.
3. Maybe cite the churches by name and not just figure 1.
4.Good, very straight forward and clear-cut.
5. Good wraps up everything very well.
6. Good facts in the fourth paragraph.
7. Good.
8. Good.
9. Good.
10. No more information is needed, you explained it all.
11. Sounds like it is from you and in your voice.
Good paper just make sure you fix any grammar or other mistakes.
-Katherine